Thursday, December 3, 2009

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Weary wanderers wanders to the west
Pilgrims punish the puny pest
Seek the snake that slithers slowly
little lice only licks the lonely
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Frank Macias
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Jesse Palma 09 December 2009

nice use of alliteration, although, halana is right, it could be a little longer.

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Halana Williams 09 December 2009

hmmm it was alright... ithink if you would've added more details to make your poem sound whole it would be complete. But if has a nice start =]

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