Weary wanderers wanders to the west
Pilgrims punish the puny pest
Seek the snake that slithers slowly
little lice only licks the lonely
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hmmm it was alright... ithink if you would've added more details to make your poem sound whole it would be complete. But if has a nice start =]
nice use of alliteration, although, halana is right, it could be a little longer.