Thursday, March 22, 2007

Marriage...A Tragedy In Two Acts Comments

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It was not your presence,
rather its absence
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John Tansey
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Ivan Donn Carswell 22 March 2007

Intriguing, well written. I'm inclined to agree you might have two poems here but the closing lines complete the 'marriage' well enough to overcome discomfort. Rgds, Ivan

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fantastic, John. especially the first act. you could probably cut the whole second act; the first stands firmly on its own. is it coincidence that the metaphors you used to describe the wife in this poem were likened to seafood? you've got my attention... Jake

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