Manifestation Of A Buddha Comments

For me this poem has very little to do with religious orientation. It tells an interesting story, which is supported by the excellent use of blank verse as a technical aesthetic. Basically I think it's less important to focus on any religious content but rather to feel what has been written here. And I mean FEEL. Because, for my 10c worth, I think this piece can be as ariligious as it might be riligious. The question is; which iterpretaion makes ht epiece more intriguing?

beautiful use of imagery that encapsulates the meaning of the poem... even though i am not religious it managed to capture my attention... keep it up :)

Sorry but I have logged on after a long long time... Hi...you have nicely written... When God holds someone's hand in Hid Hand then nothing remains valuable for someone.... prayers...keep it up...

Hi Cheryl...Nicely manifested. We all have a Buddha inside. The sole purpose of our existence is to realize and bring out the Buddha in us from within. Not everyone may be able to achieve that but manifest to some extent or the other to make the world a better place to live in! !

oh God what a great poem and inspiring one. it really touched my heart. keep it ip the good work.

Good Day Senora Moyer, I have read your poem about 'Manifestation of a Buddha', really impressive of your thought. Im not a poet but all I can do is to write my feelings, some said its a poem. Maybe Im a sick lover who needs deep and true love. By the way Senora Moyer, I thank you for that phrase 'All that we are is the result of what we have thought..' Lofty Thinking.. Until here Senora, more poems ahead. - Aldrich Angeles

This poem has great potential, quit cool, really enjoy reading through

That's a brilliant expression of the passage of time and circumstance, Deb

I hate to insult as i am a fan of your work but it seems like a first draft, although it has great potential and great meaning.

Wow is all I can say! It embodies tight historical context with the smooth running of verse. Thank you!

The form and the richness of the manifestation blend beautifully! It grips the reader. Compact and deep! Gerry

well cheryl, the poem has great potential, i will hasten to say. the depth of the message balaced by the simplicity of its delivery is one strong point of your work. However, i must say that as far as form is concerned, your work is slightly lacking in rythm. the language is a bit plain or prosaic. Also i have a bit of a problem with the line construction. the excessive enjambment made it seem as if you were finding it difficult knowing where to break your lines. Your message is great but i would suggest a reworking of the poem to infuse rythm and not to give everything away... make your readers look forward to the next line, not sure of what to expect. that way you keep them reading. the secret is: show, dont tell. work on those lines. i also couldntr help noticing some problematic tenses (or is it just me?) : ...by a God, some believe. These terrible times has called him forth. Molding him into... i thought it would be 'these terrible times [have]' I LOVED YOUR LAST THREE LINES, HOWEVER. A BEAUTIFUL CLIMAX!

Cheryl, i think that was a very well thought out and inspired poem. it really showed how you view buddah and that makes it even more poiniant.

great poem cheryl, the structure of the stanzas is enlighting and the choice of words you use helps decribe more about thre poem itself.

A short, concise and narrative poem but pregnant with meaning and message.Nice one cheryl, wish to read more works from you.

Awesome poem I like the second to last line. Good point i like it

mmmm...Cheryl! ! .. Food for thought....we are what we eat so to speak...Mind Body & Soul awesome Bev....

nice peice to read, it made me think what else the mind can do. thanky you for showing me and letting me read this amaing peice.

I found this very interesting to read. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concept. Although I personally do not regard this child as a god of any sort, but more of one who sought to find the true God and on the journey, found that the only way to have a relationship with the true God was to empty of oneself, that is, their desires, wants, needs, goals, dreams, passions, self. The result is what comes forth from such desire to be truly one with God. Of course, onlookers see something different and so a god is created and so too is a new religion. Everything this child shared was a truth revealed to him by the one true living God, but man's own fear and ignorance is what caused a new view to come forth instead. Aside from that though, you have worded well the journey of this child from a child of sin to a child of faith and belief, who in return found a purity and holiness that can be attained by all mankind, if they have the same dedication as this one did. Man's perception, assumptions, etc, is what turned this simple child's life into something godlike and is now revered as one. (MY view anyway) You have expressed this well and it has a good flow and rhythmn in it. Well done. Many blessings to you

A nice poem with deep description, words and diction siut the subject matter, the end 'All that we are is the result of what we have thought. The mind is everything. What we think we become.” no doubt interprets universal theme, there is a deep powers in thought, the universe itself is a wave of though of powerful mind. Shanazar