Monday, August 4, 2008

Makeup Comments

Rating: 3.5

Makeup hides her feelings
Makeup hides her face
So many layers of makeup
Her true colors can't be traced
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Payyton Egerstaffer
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Matthew Harrison 18 August 2009

Wonderful concept. I think you could really develop this poem. Your first stanza was enough to enrapture a guy who just got done working on his car ;) . Obviously I've never worn make-up but the imagery was perfect and as far as I know, unexplored. This one deserves another draft. I love it.

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Payyton Egerstaffer

Payyton Egerstaffer

Fort Polk, Louisiana
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