Lucky Thirteen Poem by Kim Barney

Kim Barney

Kim Barney

I was born in a bank - - my mother went there and made a deposit

Lucky Thirteen

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A birthday wish for my friend Flo,
for she has turned thirteen!
She's different from most girls, though;
she's not a beauty queen.

She's like a bird perched on a branch
without a single leaf.
No make-up for this simple girl;
she's plain beyond belief.

She likes to hike among the hills
and spend her time outside.
She doesn't sit and dream about
the day she'll be a bride.

I went to meet her yesterday
and brought my dog Tupi
so we could hike up Diamond Fork
and see what we could see.

Her little brother, Billy Joe,
was on his turbo trike,
and Billy wondered, could he go
and join us on our hike?

I said, why not? And went inside
to look for my best friend.
I found Flo underneath the sink,
and she was at wit's end.

They had a broken disposal.
Monday was the first day
that someone could come to fix it,
but she tried anyway!

They also had no Internet.
Router was not plugged in.
When she found such an easy fix,
she spouted a huge grin.

She couldn't even rue the fact
her kitchen wasn't neat;
a pile of broken tubas stacked
there, hazards for the feet.

Grease on her face and on the wall;
eye-catching, that's for sure,
but she said 'It'll wipe right off, '
and then said nothing more.

Outside, we found the sky was grey,
lingering clouds above.
I had to button up my coat,
and tug upon my glove.

A car parked on the street took off
and drove too near the pup.
Tupi ran hard as he could, but
he never did catch up.

Tupi kept running circles ‘round
young Billy and his trike,
which made our progress slow or stop
at times upon our hike.

'Hold on, my friends, for I smell a
scent of musk! ' I exclaimed.
No one likes skunks, so we turned back,
for which we can't be blamed.

Lucky Thirteen
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Hidden in the poem are the names of 13 of the same type of creature. Can you identify the type of creature and then find all 13?
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
LeeAnn Azzopardi 10 March 2022

brilliant poem Kim

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Kim Barney 14 March 2022

Thanks, LeeAnn. Can you find any of the creatures?

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 13 April 2022

So well crafted, Kim. Nice rhyme full of great images..Loved it. Top marks and to my Poem List.

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Kim Barney 13 April 2022

Thank you so much, Rose Marie. I almost didn't even write this as a poem because it is primarily a hidden-word puzzle. Imagine my pleasant surprise to actually have you add it to your Poem List!

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 13 April 2022

Lovely, lovely poem. So fascinating to read. Very entertaining.

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Kim Barney 06 April 2022

Okay, I will make it easier for those who are having trouble. The hidden creatures are all fish, and the very first one is 'perch'..

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Grace Diane Jessen 30 March 2022

Cute poem and fun puzzle, Kim! I identified the type of creature and found 10 for sure, maybe all 13. I'll have to check my dictionary.

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Bri Edwards 23 March 2022

I like the poem though some parts are....hmm? .....mysteries to me. Tubas? Rhyming is fine. I shall not do any searching. bri ;)

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Kim Barney 13 April 2022

Tubas is there because it is hiding one of the fish. The word 'bass' is found in 'tubas stacked...'

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Kim Barney 01 April 2022

What? ? ? You won't do any searching, when YOU are the one who got me started writing these hidden item things in the first place? : ) : ) : ) : ) : )

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