Walk away if your presence
drains away someone's luck
Don't say a word be quite
If it's hurting them
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I would suggest you to concentrate on penning beautiful poems rather than penning these trolls kind of poems! Don’t be carried away with some superficial comments! None (even a critic) is our enemy! By the way, your line 4 needs editing (please correct it as: it hurts) ! Go ahead! God bless you!
I feel, if you go on penning this way, people can’t always accept you!
In my belief, the Christian Belief, Luck never counts, love, honesty and humbleness do count. But I know, your poem is containing that each person on his/her own must know if he/she distracts the other's luck. This is a moral in the eastern way of living. This is a very interesting poem, Rini, and created with great knowledge. Thank you for sharing. A 10+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ for the vote.God's Blessings be in Abundance.
This poem carries a typical message to a person who is an obstacle to the path of your progress! I don't think Rini, we are competent enough to advise people through poems! Everyone has the freedom like you! PH is nobody’s sole property! Everyone has his/her style of working! You are at the very early stage of your literary career (don’t count your number of poems) . We have to learn many things from senior poets!
Thanks Dillip..As you said i am just a beginner in this world of poetry, and in poemhunter i do have lots of poet friends from whom i am learning everyday. And all are good to me, this poem is not about anyone on this site. just wrote for a change what came into my mind. Anyway i appreciate your openness
Don't say a word be quite If it's hurts them Because their achievements are bigger than your distraction........touching expression with nice theme. Beautiful poem shared. Thanks for sharing.
To fade away for a perceived reason seems harsh. However, this poem has many questions attached to it.+++10
Sail away, don't step your foot on their shore because it's meant for precious pearls....precious words.