Loving Me Comments
Loving me is a waste of life.
You'll find me delicious at first. I'll come for you and you'll
feel like the only person in my world, because you will be.
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3. Doesn't work. A lot of telliness and the poem ends on a cliche (the puzzle piece/hole/etc has been done so many times by so many people.)
Really, really liked it until the first sentence of the last 'paragraph' - (As you leave a piece of you will rip out and the adhesion will stay with me forever.) . It just seemed awkward. If it weren't for that I would have given it a 10 (i gave it a 9)
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9/10/2025 9:34:36 PM # 1.0.0
OK when I first read it I like and then when I read over I didn't like it as well. I want to rework the words a litte.