Lover’s Suicide Comments

Of course, she isn’t happy w/ the thought of killing herself. And just because someone’s smiling, doesn’t mean she’s happy. There are diff. kinds of smiles..happy, sad, bitter..duh.

a beautiful write about an emotion few feel and admit too. great.

It would have been fine but for two lines: I found myself smiling At the thought of nearly dying This seemed more like an attempt to keep a fluid rhyme scheme than to enrich the poem. I don't think humans do that, even the really depressed ones. They aren't happy with the thought of killing themselves, they simply cannot find another way out of their sad little lives. I shall give it-well I would give it a 7.5, but I can't, so I will give you a 7.

A poignant write...nice imagery and good choice of words.

wow that was so sad but also very beuatiful amazing job keep it up

wow. awesome job. i love it. i like how you rhymed every line. great job.

a very sad but interesting poem... nice... keep writing Athena *** words will change the world ***

This is a very detailed portrayal of a heartbroken lover's thoughts. I liked your rhyme scheme and the ending 'Loving him made me feel so happy And the only thing that also killed me', showing both sides of love. Intense poem, but the last several lines change rhythm abruptly and affects the flow preceding them. Good combination of emotion, imagery, and rhyme here.

a very nice introspective poem..well written/rhymes..wonderful..A10 keep on writing... Ency Bearis

i love this piece right here i actually just shared it wit my friend