Lover’s Suicide 2 Comments

The two pieces of writing are a story that is well told. You brought the reader in to your life and feelings. The pain is real and felt. A worthy exercise for a broken heart. GW62

Both Love Suicide poems is a great piece. This one is my fav of the two. But this needs some light editing espically with your stanzas and verses. I suggest also to spell out 'And' when you start a verse. The emotion is touching and vivid and I sense you could even do more. Such as not only adding pain, and the heartbreak but a little expression of anger could be used. Well I Like the poem but I definately could see more done. And you can do it. Keep Writing.

this is very sad, so much hunger for love... must be a painful experience. but very nice poem indeed. keep it up

Much better, a good follow up. I give THIS one a 10.

very sad, but beautifully written. im adding it to my favorites. i can feel the hurt you've expressed in this poem. that may be because i too have felt that same pain, or maybe its just because youve writen it so good, but whatever the reason is, its awesome. fanastic job.100/100.

another interesting poem. i like the way you use rhyme...............