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But the fates had decreed he would never reach land For his ship was sunk in a storm As he slipped neath the water his tongue called her name, His sweet Rosie held him in her arms... you are writing a big story in such a short poem. develop it and write a novel out of it. thank u. dear poetess Noreen. tony

A narrative romantic tragedy well articulated, and nicely written to capture the essence of the story. A case of tragedy in the bliss of love. It's a lovely poem. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.

WOW! ! ! I love it, what a wet twist!

This the epitome of Romantic Love, which not only triumphs over death (that's a given in Western culture) but also over the compromises of ordinary life. The reunion of the lovers at the end (whether it is a dream or a reality is irrelevant - it's triumph of the spirit) is a satisfying dramatic closing. I re-read Keat's EVE OF ST. AGNES a couple of months ago - when my city was locked in a bitter winter just like the castle in the poem. Poems like Keats's and yours are so refreshing to the troubled human spirit. They celebrate what is best in us.

this makes me feel like driving to the ocean and slipping neath the waters. i wonder who i hear calling my name. hmmm? how long ago, i wonder. thanks for sharing. there seemed to be a little rhyming going on, though it wasn't real obvious. of course, if he'd been a REAL man, like me, he would have run away with rosie; his father and his fortune be damned.............NOT! bri :)

A very well written tragic love song, with a lovely ending... they met for ever. ...... truly a heart touching penning. Incidentally, today is my birth day, feeling very lonely, I dedicated this poem to my loved (An angel in the night) - you may read

This poem reminds me of 'The Lady of Shalott' and I like it. You've missed out a word in the first line of the second verse though Noreen: 'she would be his'?

From sadness there comes joy, excellent work.

Beautifully written and very touching. A sad poem that turned tragedy into happiness. Lovers met again forever. I have a poem If We Ever Meet Again. Please stop by when you get a chance. I really do appreciate your comments on my poems. Regards.

a great ending to the poem. enjoyed

Quite a love story, very emotional.Liked it!

I am tempted to repeat David Wood's appropriate comment: Poetic justice served well!

a tragedy written with such beautiful words. amazing. please read some of my poems and comment. :)

A sad tale poignantly narrated! The course of true love never runs smooth! !

Poetic justice served well. A lovely story.

Great story. Very entertaining. I liked the ending.

A wonderful write with a great story so beautifully written!

A wonderful poem, a great ending.

a good read, enjoyed

Oh poignant....it such cruel feeling then comes the sweet write...loved it_Soul