Love’s Nothing But Your Basic Nature, Comments

wowwww lovely metaphors! ! ! ! ! cool shade of tree and unconditional love great thoughts nicely portrayed a tenner from me (tried to give you +10 but this system didnt allow so I post a tenner to you)

nicely written revealing the love and kindness which nature shares spontaneously and teaches us to act accordingly...in a selfless and unconditional way... 10 points..

i like how each line is precise and specific with either detail or meaning, nice write

God has given us abundant Love, The generous heart with a boon to serve. . . . But Love asks nothing in return, Dear! Nor it wants to use and throw, Nor it puts conditions, nor rider any, It gives and gives it grow and grow. You say it all and with a fervor. CP

What an approach! You have taken a simple TREE and made it messiah of Love, and that's true.A simple tree can teach Love to us humans!

''Cause Love’s nothing but your basic nature, A sharpened image, beyond Ego’s Layers.' Amazing lines... Overall the poem is very good n great intentions..

This poem has a wonderful message. Good job!

I love the message, and there are some really awesome expression that really flow and get me excited by your ability to write. However, the below stanza seems awkward to me. Sentence structuring and wording just aren't normal, and the rest of the poem doesn't lend to being able to read it smoothly, and I'm almost not sure you're saying what you mean to. What you give you'll certainly get back, More at times, who receives once see. Love you give then it can't happen, That other's heart not jump in glee. If I'm right, you're trying to say: once someone receives love they can't help but be happy and return love. If I'm right, then obviously I get the stanza, but in the awkward wording and structure my brain screams out wait, stop...what's going on? That in my opinion slows the feel of the poem, and takes away from delivering the message. In an analogy, you made a great pizza, but it wasn't delivered in the 30 minutes you promised. But that's just my opinion, thanks for inviting me to read.

'Cause Love’s nothing but your basic nature, A sharpened image, beyond Ego’s Layers. So true of the fundamental nature of a human.