Love Revised Comments

this poem is so graceful..well written..like a classic lovestory

this is much better! i did enjoi the revised version more.. but it seems a diffrent poem more than a revision. i love a few stanzas that particularly stood out. 'Your absence is a day of dismal view but sunshine always springs from you ' and 'your touch I yearn when we’re apart I need you feed my beating heart ' it was a fresh and spun view of your poem and i loved it. good night, love love