Love...Part 1 Comments

love is a funny ball game, Raji...it often beats you at the post unaware...collect the ball and move towards the centre confidentially again good expressive write...wringing out the pain inside mind...10

If emotions were tears.... and eyes the life's canvas! If your lexis are the emotions and this poetry the life's canvas........ This is the most beautiful picture I had seen drawn by an artist of immense talent... the theme of love is much-trodden and then double it up with tragedy..... you will find so many bouquets sccattered all around you... each one of them more beautiful than the earlier..... you have written a landmark piece but just a suggestion... if you would not mind.. the length is long and would have better effect on the reader if you would split it in 2 parts... just a suggestion... a 10 for you here forever!

To fill up the void waiting pores In the unknown depths of ur anxious self You must fall in love without noise And rinse urself with the humblest devotion I must fully agree with Kee, a big 10 for you Charles Garcia

To fill up the void waiting pores In the unknown depths of ur anxious self You must fall in love without noise flow of a good verse