Love In The Moonlight (A Senryu) Comments
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I enjoy reading comments like this! Tells me I succeeded in reaching out and touching another soul
moonlight rides the sky spilling shadows like a quilt over his shoulders......wow, what an impressive expression! Beautiful poem with lofty theme. Thank you again dear madam for sharing this tiny gem.
I am so glad my dear friend has found such enjoyment in this piece which I still find enjoyment in! ! ! ! !
A pleasant and pleasing use of personification device that empower this short but significant work!
I am sorry it took forever to reply. My e-mail decided that all messages from PoemHunter were scam and dumped them in the scam folder.. I was getting all weepy thinking no one liked me : ( I should have known better! Thank you for your comment about the effect of personification on this poem! ! ! Such comments are helpful to me.
What is making me wonder is the 'over his shoulder'... What does that mean? Someone loving others but not expecting anything in return? The person/entity doesn't even really look back. Or do they? That final line left me thinking, but I guess that is what good literature is supposed to do - answer some questions but leave a lot unsaid. A wonderful poem ma'am. Thanks for sharing
I think your conclusion is better than what I was thinking! ! Poetry is just like a woman, isn't it? Full of mystery and wonder! The good literature anyway. Thank you for allowing me to think I am capable of writing such!
The use of 'quilt' also made me wonder if it is suggesting 'comfort'? Given that the poem is about love, does this mean an abundance of love can provide comfort? I guess so. That is how I interpreted the first two lines.
Quilt- -goes well with the patches of moonlight and the geometric shapes a quilt is made of and then there is a discrete reference to a bed which a quilt covers with homespun love and soft textures. It also references another word in the poem. I like your take on it being comfort- that is a lovely interpretation indeed!
This is wonderful! What I love the most about it is that you use two wonderful poetic devices in the first two lines, i.e - personalisation and a very well worked simile. The very first two words 'moonlight rides' gives it a movement which is the soul of this poem. But then, in the second line you use the verb 'spill' - this is a very interesting choice of word, largely because it probably suggests that there's an abundance [of love].
Part 1- Red Soul, I swear no one gets into the nuts and bolts of a poem the way you do! Tis very rewarding for a writer for her poem to be taken seriously. I write a lot of humorous poetry- it is a very good way to reduce stress and anxiety and it is a way to make other people smile. But this is the kind of poetry I like to write...
This is simply brilliant of imagination perfect.......Susan.......outstanding........thanks for sharing 10
You're spoiling me, Deepak! ! ! But I like being spoiled because of this poem! ! ! Thank you for the 10 as well! ! ! !
The moonlight and the quilt of shadows gave me an image of a dark horseman and his cloak galloping across the sky. Three short sentences got my imagination fired up. A lovely Senryu..10+
The sheer fun of writing and reading is using our imagination to go places and see things we would never see in our everyday life. You have written such an excellent image yourself!
Dear Susan, Fewer among still few poets can attempt a Senryu and succeed in the debut attempt. These three lines fill the whole Earth, the whole sky and the whole waters of my World of imagination. Being born on a moonlit night, I am a lover of moon and moonshine and its shadows spilled anywhere- be it a supporting shoulder or an aching heart or on the drops of tear shed by the lover over lives and lives for the beloved. Thank you dear lovely friend, for bringing back the rain of youth and the flood of emotions back to my writing table. I felt like someone so close to my soul sang a song of love with the sweetest voice. Let God bless you with all His soft corner. Regards. Subhas
I am so very flattered by your comment- -I tried hard with this one- -the boundaries and strictures governing these types of poems can bridle and hobble a tongue! Thank you so much for sharing your association with moonlight
Concise but beautiful having stunning expression. Beautiful poem on love in moonlit. Nice penmanship. Thanks.
I was in the mood for a Haiku or Senryu or two, and noted this one in your repertoire. How delighted I am to come across it. Wonderfully envisioned, and perfectly executed. Brilliant piece, Susan! (I'll read it a few more times before moving on) :) s
Thank you hugely! ! ! ! To hear you delight in it and commend it is like getting a gold medal at the Olympics! ! ! ! You've just make this a kinder day, Seamus! ! :))
The imagery! you are skilled painter...so vividly in my mind, Loved it Susan!
It's fun painting images, isn't it? I know you do because of your nom de plume :)
This poem unrobed me Susan.I love the images-moonlight Riding, the sky Spilling shadows, quilt, his shoulders, it's very sexual and sensuous in a delicate Japanese way. My imagination is creating an exotic story.Thank you Susan, full marks! ! !
Thank you, Norah! ! ! ! I love your imagery- - this poem unrobed me- - -now that was a perfect line- - having read your poetry, it does not surprise me that you responded so poetically. Yes, you understood the desire to put sexuality and sensuality across in a delicate manner! Thank you so much for the feedback! ! !
Simply beautiful.... Susan! I think I have commented almost on all your poems. Finding one on which my comment is not there is a task before me!
Bless your heart. I wish I could post more poetry- -I am so amazed by the number of quality poems that so many poets on PH can post all in one day... I swear my jaw drops and hits the desk! I am trying now to post a poem a week... that's blood, sweat, and tears! ! !
So Much Said And Painted In Such A Beautifully Heart Touching Way! ! ! ! ! Just Wonderful! ! ! ! ! Love This! ! ! ! ! Adding To Favorites! ! ! ! ! 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Love! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Rebecca! I'm glad you enjoyed this- I wanted to say something romantic in a way that was unusual.... shadows and shoulders and moonlight and quilt seemed to be words that whispered romance if put together in a haunting way. I so enjoy your encouraging comments and rating! ! !
With the dreams of love and the muse of life. Thanks for sharing.
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7/23/2025 1:13:34 PM # 1.0.0
Anjandav- - Glad you enjoyed it