Love Has Passed Me By Comments

Compared with your poem, 'If It's Not Really You, ' this pales. I think the rhyme weakens it. Rhyme is difficult to do correctly on serious poems. The meter in this poem is off, so your good images come up wanting. You do have some good images here, but having just read your previous poem and finding it so well done, I would say to give up the rhymes until you can master a perfect meter with them. Just my opinion. Raynette