Love At The Age Of Six Comments

Twice, so far, i've read Iam where i would use I am or I'm. is this a signature of your poetry? Highschool camed They meet again ............'came' 'met' ............well, ok, i'll ALLOW meet here and a while later as well. and High school. He saw her laying Down on the ground..............i think you want lying. the verbs lie and lay can certainly be confusing. i also have not always been sure which spelling of which verb (tense) to use. many people do not use the correct word! He felt his tears Started rolling down sunshine! ! ! ! ....? ? ? maybe He felt his tears Starting to roll down upon sunshine! ! ! ! ...........? ? Here is that angel Who had cried Writing this poem Putting his emotions beside...............'YOU' are the angel. you died also and then wrote this? ? i think aside rather than beside. unlike the previous commenter, i liked the way you put this together. how could it be simpler and be so informative and entertaining? ? i assume you made this up or have written about others OR you lied to PH about your age (born in 1995) . hee-hee to MyPoemList. would you like to have a poem in my/our monthly showcase, which i put into my poem list on PH. it/they goes/go by month, year, and 'Section'. let me know if you are interested or want more info. bri :) He saw her laying Down on the ground..............i think you want lying. the verbs lie and lay can certainly be confusing. i also have not always been sure which spelling of which verb (tense) to use. many people do not use the correct word! Twice, so far, i've read Iam where i would use I am or I'm. is this a signature of your poetry?

Flip flops in a rather lovely romantic tale give way to stability but sadly it lasts for a short while and the relationships ends in a tragedy with the death of the beloved after an accident. Very poignant narrative. The poem could have been more engrossing if the presentation was simpler. Instead of going non-stop, the content could have been divided into easy-to-read sentences or phrases. Wishing you all the best. Thanks.