Love At First Sight Comments

I do like this one a lot. thats because I am a born romantic. your writings are very good and clear. well done Alexia.

now heres a poem/tale of true high school romance.not like the movies where the cool kid always gets the cheerleader, or a dorky kid gets remade and still gets the girl of his dreams, this is a true write of how pubity really is, the guys and girls pushing you to be with some1 cause of how they look or bcuz they are in the cool crowd, but even if they are cute or handsome they dont attract you mentally, cuz pyhsical apearence fades then what are you left with..it is almost like my poem 'the best 50 bucks, i ever won'..read it sometime

This is the most romantic poem... I've ever... Very nice

Excellent flow of words with good rhyming...a common incident in life is greatly portrayed...well done

beautofully written, well done

Just one thing, perhaps: either write the complete word 'more' (line 4 from the end up) , or include an apostrophe if you want to indicate dialect, 'mo'.' The last line, 'from then my life had never been right, ' seems ungrammatical, not clear as to meaning. Do you mean, 'from then on my life changed'? or 'I realized I had not really lived before'? The line would benefit from re-phrasing. Thanks again!

The poem moves swift in simple, though appropriate, rhythms that give the poem its charming tone of youthful excitement, young life. The story may be common, but the telling is insightful-no matter how others may jeer and taunt, the young boy's world is a thousandfold more special, magical, and exciting than the world of his detractors. The rhymes also contribute to this informal, ironic, tone which is the perfect one for the young boy's final epiphany! Thanks for sharing.

i really felt u expressed ur feelings quiet well

She smiled gently like a breeze - making oxygen escape my lungs, with a deep breathe. 'Excuse me' was all with a soft voice she said, I moved away from her path like almost half dead. Very good could feel the moment and sent me back nany years to my youth - thank you

Its a good poem in many ways.I enjoyed reading.keep up the good writing.

pretty interesting to read... it's actually brilliant... (^-^)

very effective poem in telling of the sudden birth of love...

this poem is brilliant

very good.......i liked your rhyming......lovely to read!

fantastic write 10+ nice

Brilliant write Like it very much 10 ++++

very imaginative. lovely write.

vivid...strong...emotive and fantastic imagery a nice write love at first sight...must read! mid section best...as usual....of the poem ; -) more in a msg cheers

it's really good, it could be a little bit better. but not by much, keep writin'

At first sight it's really hard to analyze love as it has many complications, anyway you handled it smoothly!