Tuesday, May 22, 2012

Love And Sorrow Comments

Rating: 4.3

You are quite the magnificent illness
Swollen with love and sorrow in my heart
Smiling at the day's stark, steady, stillness
Beautifully torn apart at your start
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Ryan C. Walker
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Locura Alaam 08 June 2012

Smoothly written; I like your way with rhymes, and how you're lines combine. Another point that caught my attention, the title; Love and Sorrow, it somehow reminded of John Keats's Song of Opposites, as he starts it by saying: Welcome Joy and welcome Sorrow. Anyways...irrelevant. Point is, an amazing poem, keep writing! Don't let it die out

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Ryan C. Walker

Ryan C. Walker

Miami, Florida
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