Saturday, February 7, 2009

Love Comments

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Anderlee Goforth
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Raiyuken Senshu 18 February 2009

Good concept miss, might I suggest a way to fix it up a little better, you should put it into stanzas, not one line, unless that was your intention, tis your work not mine.... As follows, may be a good correction of it- Title: Love Love comes, love goes as flowers bloom to die, they are yet born again, same as love which has no end tell me please if this was at all helpful, I mean no mean criticism, this revison is only friendly suggestion.

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