Lost In Winter Comments

As well as agreeing with Martha's critique, I'd also like to see more flow and continuity between lines. There's lots of feeling in this poem, Raven. Sadness, despair, angst, all of it. Make them play louder with a good tweak here and there. Best wishes, Gina.

The near repetition of the first two lines of the first two stanzas works very nicely. I'd have liked to see the second line nearly repeated in the third stanza as well.