Lost In Thought Comments

Well, there is a lot of thought in there and, if it was your intention to portray the confusion brought by it, you've done well. I have a personal issue with the word 'coz' as, otherwise your grammar and diction, is otherwise spot on and it seems unnecessary to the work - 'because' works just as well in the flow of the piece so it's not a metre issue. Also, maybe breaking the piece up into sections might help the reader digest it. Still an interesting and thought provoking write though.