Sunday, November 8, 2009

Losing My Heart. Comments

Rating: 5.0

With your head bent carelessly
..................................on my breast,

And your legs hot and trembling
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Fay Slimm
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Alison Cassidy 21 November 2009

As a fellow dog lover, I adore this poem. As a poet, I admire the clever way you have introduced your subject (I was quite aroused there for a moment, he he) . A joyful poem about love and licks! Hugs to your both, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Eyan Desir 21 November 2009

the beggining of the poem Was very sweet I liked the way you ended it surprise ending.... good job

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Patricia Gale 19 November 2009

Loved it! What a catch in the end!

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John Knight 19 November 2009

Hi Fay - Beautiful - I love all your November Poems - You are a pleasure a perfect poet. What is it with Girls and Puppy Dogs? - For reincarnation I've ticked the box 'Golden Labrador - nice house in Cornwall - with lots of daughters! '. Us Boys would all love the same treatment - Snuggling - Stroking - Hugging - Kissing & Licking - I'll be your puppy Fay! In return we'd promise to be Faithful and Excited just to be with you. I love the structure - liguistically elegant couplets and lots of.................................. to give us space to use our cannine imagination. We all lost our hearts to this poem - lovely - TEN. Love you in Poetry - JOHN

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Georgia Girl 09 November 2009

LOL, as I started reading this I just knew that it was going to be the sweetest love poem and lo 'n behold IT WAS! ! LOL just not a romantic one -lol..... very very sweet love poem about a best friend loved ever so dearly-10+++

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Patti Masterman 08 November 2009

Well I pretty much lost mine, reading this. Want to go find a new puppy now..(smile)

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