Losing Grip Comments

very nicely written. such emotion! ! very good job!

I like it; nice and smooth. However, I do think the first stanza puts it off a bit... The rest, however, especially the ending, makes up good for it! Keep it up, I know you can do better!

Im holding on, but im losing grip How long will it be before i slip? .............! ! ! age old dilemmas...done nicely in a poetic manner cheers :)