Lonely In The Dark Poem by nouri black

fine writing about lonerliness, fear and darkness.Maxim Muyu

Nice. I'm going through the same feelings. Fortunately I found a friend to help me throught this hard time.

I went through this too, Jesus found me. i feel what you mean.

I loved this one very heart felt, we all feel like we are alone at times but with god we are never alone he is always with us.

I know exactly how you feel. great poem.

I didnt know what it was I feel so endangered I saw an extended hand That wants to grab me towards its unrevealed body I ran away I hear a male vioce Calling my name superb expression great 10+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

But suddenly their voices r gone (line 15) , ok seriously do i really even have to explain why this is wrong? using texting language in a piece that you make is just unprofessional and distracting to the reader, is it really that hard just to type out the word are? you cant even try and defend yourself by blaming it on syllables or rhythm. Just knowing that some one, (line 40) , in this example the author spelt someone as some one when it is clear that was not there intention.

It really dark here (line 8) , In this example the word It should be replaced with It's I hear my mom voice (line 9) , In this line from the poem makes no sense, the way that its written leads the reader to believe that the author is hearing their own voice, and if I'm not mistaken that is not what the poet wanted to portray.

Ok before people start raging at me I'd like to say that I respect poets and all the hard work they put into their poems. However from my perspective it seems almost as if this poem was written by an unprofessional teenager who was to lazy to edit and correct their mistakes. To support my point here is a list of a few of the mistakes:

this is a very spiritual and revealing poem... i love your openess