Even in the presence of people
It engulfs the inner mind
It leaves you wallowing in your own little world
Doors of friendship are shut and there is no way into it
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I can see where you are heading with this poem. To reach that goal more exactly I'd suggest tightening up in places and looking at the punctuation. Doing that can only enhance the meaning and sentiments behind your poem. I keep thinking of a bullring: viz. I was there with thousands of cheering fans but in pure reality I was almost alone. Well, thee was the bull and me. One was going to die.
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I can see where you are heading with this poem. To reach that goal more exactly I'd suggest tightening up in places and looking at the punctuation. Doing that can only enhance the meaning and sentiments behind your poem. I keep thinking of a bullring: viz. I was there with thousands of cheering fans but in pure reality I was almost alone. Well, thee was the bull and me. One was going to die.