Friday, April 25, 2008

Loneliness Comments

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what's loneliness?
lonelyness is what you feel when your
love is gone, when your heart turns to stone
when you think of things to get you numb,
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Chris Mendros 04 May 2008

That's a pretty apt description. I would only change 'allow' to 'force' (or something more forceful, anyway) . 'when you cry but no tears come, ' there's not much more lonely than when even tears have deserted you. This line could perhaps sum the whole thing up? Thanks for sharing.

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