Lone Soul Comments

Such a clear expression of poem about friend.... rated 10+++++ You may visit my HEARTACHES WILL NEVER LAST, TAKE TIME TO THINK, and BECAUSE I LOVE HER....

Domanick, most good poems work by using vivid images, words that appeal to the senses. THis poem is mostly made of abstract words (feel, future, view) and is just telling, not showing. Maybe stop writing for a while and read lots of good contemporary poetry (billy Collins, Mary Oliver) if ou want to improve. if you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Thanks! Yrs, JC