London Jazz Comments

Very nice list of images, but were this my poem, I'd work towards shorter lines and put some space between the images so they stand out. I would look at the list and cut the three weakest. In short, this is a fine poem in the making; it just needs more revisions, I think. I love this kind of poem and just posted one myself about Vaughn Williams. With the help of my wife, I cut about 50% of the images, many that I was attached to. That's my two cents.