Lola Won'T You Be Mine? Comments

Run away my little nymphet Your beauty makes me sick It makes me so ill The kiss of your ruby lips beautiful......cdnt be bettered and the quartet coming back in waves like the rising tide creates a strong back ground music....and adds so much feeling and tumult to the experience very well written i so agree with shirley.. ;) cheerts

Hi Venla, This is great - such a different rhythm - almost a song. My favourite lines are 'Run away my little nymphet Your beauty makes me sick It makes me so ill The kiss of your ruby lips' Cant wait to see more of your writing.