Listen To The Sunset Comments

Your use of imagery and color makes this a better poem. Try using both whenever in all your compositions. It will take more time, but they will add more meaning to what you say. Remember a poem is usually better when it evokes thoughts and feelings not directly or explicitly expressed in the poem but alluded to. This creates some mystery.

Sara, in all honesty, I love the work. AS writers, we should be pushing one another to always get better. He has written me in my imbox really wanting to know what I think. I think he's good enough to even give us more.

I really disagree with Luke Johnson below! no metaphorical purpose, your using creativity, imagination an such.

I think the poem is very, very lovely.

Really enjoyed reading that, great flow and rythem.

Zac....if you are going to use an abnormality like 'listening to a sunset'....which does not techniquely speak....you have to fill the work with more metaphorical purpose. I like the idea though.