Bushels of light from the electric maples
float in the underpass.
Night enters the cemetery like a spade.
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I admire the tightness of this. 15 compressed lines, perfect in sound and image, and you've said it all.
My God Martin this is good. I hope Sue has used it for 10 X 3. It's incredibly atmospheric. 'Night enters the cemetery like a spade' and 'We eat from a bowl of sirens' are terrific, and you prepare the way for them so subtly. Stunning. A perfect blending of content and form. jim