Wednesday, March 5, 2008

Lines And Lingerie Comments

Rating: 3.6

between the lines are words
you have to be aware
some say the truth is there
my thoughts are washed and fresh
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ONElia AVElar
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Here’s my new comment two years after the previous. What a prudent I was! I was hidden by Mr. Saba and Mr. Freud. Now I can notice something hung on and drying underwear. In PH, my last poem is Last Waltz in Genoa. My previous inspiration was the movie Last Tango in Paris. So Paul tore the Jeanne’s collant and standing embraced her. The lingerie’s problem has been placed on file: its end is in my last dance and not in that movie. To tell as Onelia, the underwear is washed now. I’ve managed this issue writing some Odysseas in Italian and those are other stories.

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Original Unknown Girl 14 September 2009

Cute playful poem depicting pretty smalls daintily flapping in the breeze! HG; -) xx

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Ashraful Musaddeq 21 September 2008

A moving composition. Short but lovely.10++

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Emancipation Planz 15 September 2008

I'd like to linger on your thoughts a whilst longer.. find some string to peg some Gs.. and net some fish to line for smoking..: ~)) .

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Ivan Donn Carswell 31 August 2008

The poem is well applauded because it is indeed good. It alludes to much while cleverly leaving just as much to the imagination... And poet's imaginations are extremely fertile... Rgds, Ivan

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Donall Dempsey 13 June 2008

Maybe it's a Freudian slip? It's a stiff breeze and well you may be down to your smalls but the truth is flapping in the wind...the answer my friend is flapping in the wind. Your thoughts are hung out clearly to dry and as always are delightful. love Donall Donall

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R H 20 May 2008

What is hidden and what is revealed - if you look closely enough you will see... clever contrasts in these bold yet fresh lines. justine.

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Original Unknown Girl 08 May 2008

A real contradiction here and I like it's playfulness. Is this a take on the old saying 'hanging out our dirty laundry in public'? Only yours isn't dirty, just clean and a wee bit risque! Clever... HG: -) xx

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David Desantis 05 May 2008

clean and sexy at the same time hahah...a good accomplishment ;)

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Roger Cornish 22 April 2008

i love the simplicity and economy of your worl, also the thoughtfulness in every line. Rogx

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Aashish Ameya 07 April 2008

wow..it is completly new imagery...like it....

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R.k Das 31 March 2008

conceals the vital part and reveals only the periphery, howsover between the lines you read, you will still be brooding over the personal symbols, ,

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These words are extremely true. Think about a poet as Umberto Saba. Now I'm reading 'Instincts and their vicissitudes' by Freud (1915, in 'Metapsychology') . Also that matter has to do with this.This poem is very sensual.

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Flora Gillingham 24 March 2008

Sardonic and playful. Love it. F

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