Saturday, July 7, 2012

Limitations In Every Aspects Comments

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There was a nice party in heaven, all the angels were there
The sky was color full, angels danced in the air
Of the hall of paradise, a glorious light,
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Ellias Anderson Jr.
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Unwritten Soul 07 July 2012

One of good aspect in your poem is, you always put some good advice and value in every poem...like this one you tell to behave moderate i, it really a nice advice...Laughing without control could be someday a struggle to meet sad in the future, dancing and partying is nothing when we really meet a real value of life...the wise in you alive well in this write to remind all young people...and whatever in future....without laughing and partying, happiness is the most important thing to looking for...but it not by these ways, a happy soul can easily comes when we do a smallest good thing...as heart knows the value and the value is the key for a smile and to be happy_Unwritten Soul

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Captain Cur 07 July 2012

Great job! Enjoyed the words and the tempo of the poem. Delivering your message is very important and you did it excellently.

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Well Done....Couplet stanzaic structure works well here...~FjR~

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Ellias Anderson Jr.

Ellias Anderson Jr.

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