Saturday, July 18, 2009

Like A Water Fall Comments

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Like a waterfall,
magnificent and powerful,
shimmering in the light of the morning,
surrounded by magical moving carpets of green
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Marta Mehrpouyan
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AtreyaSarma Uppaluri 19 July 2009

Romance in a perfect setting; with both wonderfully captured. Even the symmetry of your poem resembles a waterfall. The line 'Tall trees extending their branches towards silver spotted clouds' is, meaningfully, the longest line; whereas, likewise, the melting of the lovers ends up in the shortest line 'and I'. Keep it up.

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Marta Mehrpouyan

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