Light The Heart Comments

....i didnt a lot of feeling in this one its a great theme but something in the last parts really didnt make me feel the poem KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK THO

For some reason, this poem just doesn't connect with the reader, Kranthi, at least not me. I seems to have a good idea for a theme, but in the telling is just falls a bit short. The final verse is not smooth like the earlier verse were and seems contrived. Perhaps a little rephrasing of it is in order, or perhaps you should try a different approach at the final verse, one that carries forward the impact of the preceeding verses. Carl.

when there is no love there is always darkness you at least found the light, to make everything alright. GR8 WRITE A TEN

I do really think that this one is fabulous.