Wednesday, March 5, 2014

Light And Happiness Comments

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Light between dark
follow the light and it becomes a spark
happiness feels all over
You remember the candies caught over
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Ash Flame
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V P Mahur 21 March 2014

Dear Ash, lovely feelings of the children is portraited here. Thanks. 'Teenagers’ Passion' .............................. .......................

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Shania K. Younce 16 March 2014

It is so true. Keep on playing and you'll see what tomorrow brings. Bien!

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Daniel Brick 09 March 2014

LIGHT AND HAPPINESS is a wonderful poem! You describe those fun times when everyone is the neighborhood is your friend and everyone plays together. There's no arguing or cheating to win - just an overall sense of sharing. I also like the quiet ending with the speaker close to falling asleep and looking forward to more of the same fun. This is a very positive poem and we need celebrate these good experiences. Because life also includes nightmare experiences as you showed in SERPENTINE ABYSS. There's a balance you achieve in writing both kinds of poems, but you already seem to understand that. PS Sure, we can collaborate! Although I think on the basis of these two poems you're doing fine on your own. But just send me something you want my input.

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