Wednesday, December 13, 2006

Life Becomes Meaningless The Day I Can'T See You Comments

Rating: 3.5

Every time I see you in your tight blue jean
I lose my mind; you know what I mean

Jean looks nice just on your body
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Sam Arjomandi
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Greenwolfe 1962 22 June 2008

Technically, this is not a very good poem. The repeated use of 'you 'is OK, as long as it's always used, but it wasn't. That's bad. There are a few well rhythmed and rhymed lines but that's about it. The message was not the best either as was reflected in the poor ending. GW62

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