Wednesday, September 25, 2013

Life A Journey Comments

Rating: 4.8

I am born.
My own clean sheet.
My road in life is incomplete.
I start my journey baby steps
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Noreen Carden
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Kim Barney 01 July 2021

Noreen, I'm just revisiting some of the poems on my favorites list...

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Dr Antony Theodore 30 March 2018

My scars i hide, my fair sides out. I walk and learn what life is about. life is precious live now so that we may die without regrets....... thank u dear poetess. tony

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Kim Barney 01 December 2014

This poem is going on my Favorite Poems list!

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Daniel Brick 29 May 2014

This poem came out of genuine experience and its truthfulness is obvious in every line. And there's not a trace of sentimentality which spoils much lyric poetry of memory to my mind. There is a double track of genuine experience the poem embodies: first, your memories of your life, and second, your meditation on the future while babysitting a grandchild. Memory and Projection, Past and Future - This is how we conquer Time. Wait, that's too aggressive a statement. This is not a poem of We Humans vs. Cruel Time, like Shakespeare's sonnets, nor is it fixated in a past we cannot recover. The title should have informed me: Life A Journey. You are at a way station on this journey, assessing how you lived the journey and wondering how the little one will live it. Janus-like you are looking backward and forward, without regret or fear. It took me a while to work my way to expressing in words what your poem had already impressed on my feelings. Your poem shows me why I value Lyric Poetry so highly!

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Amitava Sur 05 January 2014

A nice elaboration of the life's passage...... loved it. You can read my Up to you.

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Mike Barrett 03 January 2014

Hi Noreen, I love what you've captured here. To me, live is an eternal voyage in which we grow awareness, knowingness and a lifetime is but a chapter in that eternal voyage. Best wishes to you and yours over 2014. Cheers!

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Bri Edwards 30 December 2013

I walk and learn what life, s about. I've learned my lesson, s have no fears. could you, noreen, please explain the form of the contractions in the above lines? one i would have considered a typo; two i consider something i'm not sure of. are you teasing me? ? ? you are! OOPS! my error....the second one would not be a contraction, but, instead, a plural noun form. right? speaking of mistakes....i guess every honest person admits to a mistake now and then. some things in my life which other people would call mistakes, however, i would term misjudgements due to lack of experience and/or knowledge............like my marriages! it is so easy to SAY live well now and sometimes so DIFFICULT to do. though i've made some mistakes and misjudgements in my life, i still consider that i have lived well....esp. compared to many people. thanks for sharing. :) bri

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Gary H 26 November 2013

: -) good stuff, that's for true.

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S.zaynab Kamoonpuri 21 November 2013

Yeah conscience does make us pay! An aweinspiring perceptive poem, splendid rhymin too.

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Mary Forrester 19 November 2013

Lovely poem Noreen, enjoyed the read.

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John Brown 11 November 2013

A very well written poem Noreen, which I enjoyed. I've never heard the term 'fair sides out' before, is it an Irish one?

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Clarence Prince 08 November 2013

Blessed are all those parents who warned, worried and prayed for their children; this is a really nice poem! Well done, Noreen!

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Clarence Prince 08 November 2013

Blessed are all those parents who warned, worried and prayed for their children; this is a really nice poem! Well done, Noreen!

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Khairul Ahsan 29 October 2013

It was such a pleasure to read this poem of wisdom! A wonderful poem with an appropriate title. Life's journey seen, traversed and told well. The last stanza is the best, the last two lines priceless! The note is good too.

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David Wood 19 October 2013

Very true words, we all benefit from hindsight. Live life with a kind and gentle heart.

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Heather Wilkins 17 October 2013

an excellent poem on life's journey. and oh the lessons we learn along the way. enjoyed this one

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Smoky Hoss 16 October 2013

All that I can say towards this very fine poem is: Amen! So well stated, in such a wise way.

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Yasmin Khan 12 October 2013

Life is a journey and many lessons we learn during the whole course. It's a nice poem with a good message to whom who are still at the outset of their journey.

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Kanav Justa 09 October 2013

Very mature write... felt good after reading it

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Roseann Shawiak 06 October 2013

I often wonder what life will hold for my grandchildren in their futures. Every moment of life is precious, more so now that I'm also in my senior years. Your poem says what I know to be true in my own life. Love this poem, it's so beautifully stated, the way you show the path to maturity by stating the past. Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn

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