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A fabulous short poem that laudably articulates all about life, desire, fulfilment, , , well penned. Full marks!

Dear bharati-nayak, The lines, Searching water From earth to heaven. gives a spiritual value to the poem. the poem travels not only birth to death (life span) and also markes its footstep in heaven.

An imaginative write with great imagery. +++10

Great piece for Bri's Showcase enjoyed sums it up really Life great write 10 ++

it's going into May's showcase, along with Jibana. thanks. bri :)

What is best, I like in this poem is the thirst that is from earth to heaven (being positive) . and poetically every line is wonderful.

(continued) ... both the S. of Liberty and the C. of Rhodes stand/stood about 33 metres (108 feet) high, according to Google/Wikipedia! ! one was stone, i assume, and was destroyed by an 'earthquake' less than a century after completion, and the other is clothed with copper sheeting i believe, which has 'weathered' to green. [i have one of me, that size, in our backyard. good enough! ] to MyPoemList. bri :)

i think this is fantastic. welllll, maybeeeee not as fantastic as many of MINE are, but.........fantastic enough! ! ! i'll probably use this AND its original Odia poem, Jibana, 'side-by-side', in May's showcase. Thanks, Bharati. I'm glad 'our' (in U.S.A.) Statue of Liberty [a gift from France long ago] was not left half-done! ! and i wish the Colossus of Rhodes was still around; i'd like to have seen THAT STATUE! ! (to continue) ..

The Bible, Book of John,4: 1-25, truly points out the solution for this spiritual as well as worldly thirst.

Oh! This is stunning! ! ! Thank you for translating it into English- how I wish I knew more than my own language that well. That is the meaning of love- translating your poem into another's language. Yes- now that you remind me, we do live life surrounded by our half-finished dreams. I do, come to think of it.] I think I should be ashamed of this half-finished way of living. Very original topic that is a topic we should ponder. 10++++

An unfinished poem, A picture half drawn, , ........... but we have to finish writing and complete drawing before we die, ...... and that's the main aim of life, well write, thanks for sharing the poem with us,10

Excellent poem. Thanks for sharing Madam. Yet, thirst is thriving Searching water From earth to heaven.

Fascinating consideration, Bharati. Is not life itself unfinished until it is no longer life? Is our incompleteness not merely further evidence of our continued being? Wonderful imagery frames a powerful contemplation. Thank you for sharing this wonderful work.

This poem takes a subject some might find depressing and makes it positive and affirming. The very fact much of our joy is deferred or cancelled or still-born makes the poet believe more strongly in its importance and no diubt wirk harder to achieve it. It's an important value to support.

Thank you poets, Akhtarjawadji, Nosheen Irfan, Edward Kofi Louis and Glen Kappy for giving your time to read my poems and the valuable comments.

Hi, Bharati! I’m glad you translated this one so I could read it. And I feel I intuit this poem well. By the thirst we know we’re still alive, yes? And I expect much will remain unfinished in our own eyes right to the end. Do you know Keats’ sonnet that begins When I have fears that I may cease to be... It is poignant because he passed at a young age. Hoping this finds you well body, soul, and spirit, Glen

A picture half drawn! ! Thanks for sharing.

I'm glad you translated this poetic gem in English, otherwise i wudnt be able to read it. A lot said in a few words. A work everybody can relate to. Yes, this is life indeed. A journey of insatiable thirst.

A beautiful short poem, thirst of knowing secrets of of life will never end.

Thank you poet Sri Sekharan Pookkat for your kind comment through a nice poem.