Friday, February 2, 2018

Life Comments

Rating: 5.0

Wow- -
This life- -
These half dreams,
The half built statue,
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Bharati Nayak
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Dr Dillip K Swain 21 October 2021

A fabulous short poem that laudably articulates all about life, desire, fulfilment, , , well penned. Full marks!

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Dear bharati-nayak, The lines, Searching water From earth to heaven. gives a spiritual value to the poem. the poem travels not only birth to death (life span) and also markes its footstep in heaven.

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Bharati Nayak 11 May 2018

Thank you so much poet Saravanan Siva for your kind comment.I am happy that you find time to visit Poem Hunter and giving valuable comment on my poem.

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Robert Murray Smith 01 May 2018

An imaginative write with great imagery. +++10

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Paul Brookes 30 April 2018

Great piece for Bri's Showcase enjoyed sums it up really Life great write 10 ++

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Bri Edwards 22 April 2018

it's going into May's showcase, along with Jibana. thanks. bri :)

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Muhammad Ali 19 April 2018

What is best, I like in this poem is the thirst that is from earth to heaven (being positive) . and poetically every line is wonderful.

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Bharati Nayak 19 April 2018

Thank you poet Muhammad Ali for reading my poem and your beautiful comment.

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Bri Edwards 05 April 2018

(continued) ... both the S. of Liberty and the C. of Rhodes stand/stood about 33 metres (108 feet) high, according to Google/Wikipedia! ! one was stone, i assume, and was destroyed by an 'earthquake' less than a century after completion, and the other is clothed with copper sheeting i believe, which has 'weathered' to green. [i have one of me, that size, in our backyard. good enough! ] to MyPoemList. bri :)

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Bharati Nayak 05 April 2018

I wonder how the reply button works here as in many of my previous trial I could not post my reply to individual comments.Perhaps some wonders are there in this 'Statue of Liberty'.I hope and wish for Bri Edward's works to weather green and be the ever present greenery in the poetic world.

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Bri Edwards 05 April 2018

i think this is fantastic. welllll, maybeeeee not as fantastic as many of MINE are, but.........fantastic enough! ! ! i'll probably use this AND its original Odia poem, Jibana, 'side-by-side', in May's showcase. Thanks, Bharati. I'm glad 'our' (in U.S.A.) Statue of Liberty [a gift from France long ago] was not left half-done! ! and i wish the Colossus of Rhodes was still around; i'd like to have seen THAT STATUE! ! (to continue) ..

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Nasarudheen Parameswaran 10 March 2018

The Bible, Book of John,4: 1-25, truly points out the solution for this spiritual as well as worldly thirst.

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Susan Williams 10 March 2018

Oh! This is stunning! ! ! Thank you for translating it into English- how I wish I knew more than my own language that well. That is the meaning of love- translating your poem into another's language. Yes- now that you remind me, we do live life surrounded by our half-finished dreams. I do, come to think of it.] I think I should be ashamed of this half-finished way of living. Very original topic that is a topic we should ponder. 10++++

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Muzahidul Reza 22 February 2018

An unfinished poem, A picture half drawn, , ........... but we have to finish writing and complete drawing before we die, ...... and that's the main aim of life, well write, thanks for sharing the poem with us,10

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Sada Bihari Sahu 16 February 2018

Excellent poem. Thanks for sharing Madam. Yet, thirst is thriving Searching water From earth to heaven.

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Seamus O Brian 14 February 2018

Fascinating consideration, Bharati. Is not life itself unfinished until it is no longer life? Is our incompleteness not merely further evidence of our continued being? Wonderful imagery frames a powerful contemplation. Thank you for sharing this wonderful work.

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Daniel Brick 13 February 2018

This poem takes a subject some might find depressing and makes it positive and affirming. The very fact much of our joy is deferred or cancelled or still-born makes the poet believe more strongly in its importance and no diubt wirk harder to achieve it. It's an important value to support.

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Bharati Nayak 08 February 2018

Thank you poets, Akhtarjawadji, Nosheen Irfan, Edward Kofi Louis and Glen Kappy for giving your time to read my poems and the valuable comments.

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Glen Kappy 08 February 2018

Hi, Bharati! I’m glad you translated this one so I could read it. And I feel I intuit this poem well. By the thirst we know we’re still alive, yes? And I expect much will remain unfinished in our own eyes right to the end. Do you know Keats’ sonnet that begins When I have fears that I may cease to be... It is poignant because he passed at a young age. Hoping this finds you well body, soul, and spirit, Glen

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Edward Kofi Louis 07 February 2018

A picture half drawn! ! Thanks for sharing.

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Nosheen Irfan 07 February 2018

I'm glad you translated this poetic gem in English, otherwise i wudnt be able to read it. A lot said in a few words. A work everybody can relate to. Yes, this is life indeed. A journey of insatiable thirst.

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Akhtar Jawad 05 February 2018

A beautiful short poem, thirst of knowing secrets of of life will never end.

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Bharati Nayak 04 February 2018

Thank you poet Sri Sekharan Pookkat for your kind comment through a nice poem.

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