Monday, July 28, 2014

Lie To Me Comments

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Let's play a game.
Let's play pretend.
Let's say our lives,
our love, will never end.
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Rouren Torres
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Bri Edwards 31 July 2014

the ones, the many, and the few are LIES? it took me a while to catch your drift. yes, i suppose pretending and lying could go hand in hand. very well written, but i almost wasn't alert enough to appreciate it fully. the best ones you keep for you! yeah, i keep a few for me as well. a great poem! ! ! to MyPoemLIst it goes. when i first read this line: There are few, and far between ............i thought you may have meant to write These are few...., but i agree that There fits well also. it just gives a little difference to how few is used. The smiles are real: .....i would probably use a semicolon rather than a colon, but, especially since this is poetry, the colon is allowed. :) :) the rhyming and use of punctuation is terrific. and i like that you felt free to vary the number of lines in the stanzas. I appreciate all of that. thanks for sharing. :) bri p.s. my favorite stanza (i liked them all, which i very often can't say about a poem) : I don't care, I don't care, I don't care; that's a line we can share.

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