I wish that I had written you
when I was young and strong and wise
I knew that I would never die
I'd face the world without disguise
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I have commented on this before, but had to come back and read it again because I really like it. I am going to mention it in my Puzzle Master Quiz 050, to be posted the day after tomorrow.
it is very humble when you call this amazing poem as a note.... unique technique has used in this letter, as the sender and receiver is the poet himself, but we can read many indications and meaning behind each word, wish you all success and genuine happiness +10 from me
I have yet to write a dear john to myself, kind of depressed in its tone, but nicely penned. Kudos to you, ghost... thumbs up!
Fine revelation in last stanza. With age comes wisdom in most cases. Seems you learned from your mistake/s.
we all have things that we wished we had done in the past and feel that as we got older it was now to late.enjoyed your poem Barry. Alan
A very impressive address to your younger self, who seems almost a different person. I know because I am in my seventies. Writing without punctuation, as you have here, is a real challenge. Regards, Michael Walker.
Commendable work...Stanzaic structure has clean, crisp movement throughout, allowing you to wave punctuation...Not an easy feat. Keep that pen pumping ~FjR'17~
The poem appeared to me a cool wind and from a natural source like sea or sky in a hot summer evening, But it was from an airconditioned unit.Really a heart touching poem.it is to you that I must speak.
I didn't realize this was poem of the day..how awesome! Our own youth as a ghost that hovers around us is how I choose to interpret your poem. It is funny to me how sometimes our younger selves are wiser than the older ones...though not always. Yes, we need to remember to save our sagest advice for ourselves before we share it around too.
Indeed that ghost child is still around. I think some spoiled and indulged him or her, and some neglected themselves. It's really never too late to take better care of that child and to listen to what he or she was trying to tell you. Thanks Pamela.
Wow! ! ! ! ! What A Truly Beautiful Moving Poem! ! ! ! ! That Ever So Strongly Does Speaks! ! ! ! ! From A Wise And Youthful Heart! ! ! ! ! Congratulations On A Wonderful, An Very Deserving Poem Of The Day! ! ! ! ! Thank You So Much For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! So Beyond 10S! ! ! ! ! +++++ Saved! ! ! ! !
Wooowwwww! ! ! ! Such an awesome composition.... Congrats on being chosen.... a big 10+++++
A letter written to self with assessment with various sequences is really interesting. Life carries memories and life unites with trust. Young and strong child must be seen and guided by parents. Penning the note pointing weakness is wise to give awareness to readers to carefully understand everything and to take care of child and other family members. Sitting quiet in crowd and watching good and evil amaze mind. But observing goodness we find new path to feel life and build a child with values. Beautiful transformation can be done by positive vibrations and values. An interesting poem is shared here. This is excellently composed. This is nice to see your poem here as the poem of the day. Congratulation! ..10
I was intrigued and mesmerize by this well thought of poem. And written with great care - consideration for those who find themselves with regret in later years. Congratulation! ! !
Thank you very much. I am very pleased with the response this verse has generated. I suppose that reflects the universal nature of regret.
I was intrigued - very attentive whilst reading this rhythmic verse. So very well thought of and written. Congratulation! ! ! Being chosen as poet of the day.
This shadow of my former self This youth transformed into a ghost...Well written
Congratulations on member poem of the day. Beautiful poem with great meaning, maybe we realise the depth of life very late in life. A unique write. Loved reading it. Thanks for sharing with us.
Thank you Geetha. I do think I took a lot for granted when I was young. Too bad we can't go back.
This is indeed a very insightful and introspective poem. It shows how changes take place in a man's personality over a period of time. But what can we do about our hypocrisy. Thanks. and see the good and evil there and think before I speak aloud
Thanks for the comment. We look back to realize that were were not so wise. I am grateful however that hypocrisy was never one of my many faults.
To quietly sit and watch the crowd! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
Better late than never, I regret having read it so late, this is wonderful poem, specially when we sit down and look back at our journey and do some retrospection.Full ****