Let Us Rise Up Like Brave Men Comments

your poems are so much fun to read- the way you encorperate dialoge into it is amazing, it really brings the poem to life. i just wish i was smart enough to get all of the 'deeper meanings'. i can sense that they're there..oh well..a few more years maybe..

this is one of the best poems you've posted on here, you have a great knack of fleshing characters out with little side stories and sub plots like yesterday i enjoyed the one with disabled guy with the neck by the window in the diner and you mentioned the weather and all and really set a scene but you introduced it all matter of fact and often through dialogue so the scene is effectively unfolding in an organic way, and in this way i feel you've arrived at a very constructive way of building your poems.