I'd like to tie a tourniquet
around your wounded heart
and watch until the blood
stops dripping
...
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A powerful feel to this one Mary. The economy that you employ is great, you avoid imposing too much of yourself onto this. It is works such as this that cry out to be laid out as a structure -allowiing the piece to be planned. Unfortunately all PH allows for is left-justification. Ah well, it doesn't detract from the impact of the piece.
Mary...This is a very strong poem, and sounds to me to be aimed at someone you care dearly about. The imagery made my skin crawl (perhaps a decendant of Poe's? ?) Hugs, Dee
Mary, I probably haven't read everything you've posted, but this is the strongest poem I've read of yours. It is well-done. The imagery is strong, the anger and pain lett unnamed; yet the reader really feels it. That's what a good poem is all about. Good work. Raynette