Left For Dead Comments

Your piece shows an ugly side of a child's life, but the strength that pulled one from the pit. Well versed, and heart felt.

your poem is gd you must have been working on that 4 a long time

painful poem that hits the heart, your flow of the poem and the good use of simple but well chosen and fitting rhyme enable the reader to get this poem straight away. I was particually taken back and affected by stanza's 2,4,6. You are a real talent at getting your point and tale across to the reader. The poem is not overly condeming which enables the reader to see the clear picture of what was going on to this child. When writing a poem of this nature it is easy to put you own thoughts and feelings into the poem and fill the poem with acting thoughts and feelings, you have refrained from doing this, that is not to say that your feelings on the subject of abuse are not there, just that you dont throw them all in, whcih makes the poem all the more appealing. Great work, painful but nessecarry. Best wishes Robin