Lay Me Down Easy Comments

Complex, deep and a joy to read, as you try to understand the choices you have made, the wrong road has brought you to a place, a feeling that you don't like, as you long for the happiness you once had that was fleeting just a reminder that you're trapped in a mindset, as you try to find your way back to freedom! I'm amazed at the way you write, just so beautiful!

This poem displays different frames of reference: the Florida experience is idealized because the perpetual summer there enhances experience; winter in Toronto renders even the best experience suspect. ONE MUST MUST HAVE A MIND OF WINTER, Wallace Stevens wrote, but he flourished on his annual Florida vacation! Setting is a key element in your poetry, it evokes both superficial and deep reactions from you. But the inner subject of this poem is freedom, not in some abstract sense, but the very immediate level of choices you can - will - must make, and the rest of it which is nor free. And that part of your life is being imagined into existence in this very poem. It's not complete yet, is it? But it's ongoing much like the car ride in the poem which is ongoing even after the poem closes.

A convincing knit of skewed assumptions and expectations, of what is full and what is empty, bewilderingly inverted. Well done, whew. 'The demon that you can swallow gives you its power, and the greater life's pain, the greater life's reply' (Campbell) .