Saturday, February 2, 2008

Laughters Neighbor Comments

Rating: 5.0

Stop what your doing.
Come a little closer to my poem.
Read it in the garden of your soul.
Wheres that you ask?
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Ivan Funk
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Fred Babbin 02 February 2008

Beautiful poem. It could have been greeting card stuff, but it's much, much, too good for that. (except one thing: the 8th line is too long - I would break it up, just for the visual effect. - I know I'm being picky) .

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