Friday, April 18, 2008

Laughter Of The Stream Comments

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I walk along by the stream,
listening to the laughter of the stones and water,
I remenber the times of joy, were they a dream?
the times I danced with the heavenly daughter.
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S.C. Setai
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Chantelle Clark 18 April 2008

This is well done. Although I have one comment to make on spelling, it could of just been missed typed or perhaps I am just picking out something that is right lol. In the 3rd line of the 1st stanza it says, '[...]times of job, where they a dream? ' Do you mean, 'were'? Anyways, well done.

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