Friday, July 2, 2010

Laughing Pain Comments

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I'm sitting, crying.
You don't even care as I lie in my puddle of sadness.
The puddle was caused by you,
The tears streaming down my cheeks, from you as well.
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Kayla Garner
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K. Bianca 02 July 2010

I like the phrase 'puddle of sadness'. It sounds really... sad. Good contrast between first and last line.

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