Latest Draft Senryu (Comic Haiku) Comments

Now I plan to include this poem in my upcoming " May 2019 Showcase" , which is a title of a 'poem', actually a group of poems, on my PH site. questions? ? ask. Thanks. bri :)

my mate is Japanese. i've made one or two origami cranes, but don't ask now how to do it! ! ! yes, somewhat comical. now get the next draft started! ! ! to MyPoemList bri :)

A brilliant senryu dear Chenou.