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see the technologists wearing yellow gowns, gloves, and masks
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Anjandev, Thank you for the very welcome words of commendation! !
This is absolutely glorious write......thank u.....anjandev roy.
Definitely you have used (ticking clock) very amazingly in between the lines, then you have described some special inner moments that hasn't been discovered by many poets yet, I would say 10 ++ for this brilliant work with many interpretations... the clock is ticking for each of us
thank you for examining this poem closely as to how it works... your observations are very helpful!
Inner self! ! To search for yourself! Inner world! ! ! Identification; As the clock ticks along. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
I can't hear what people are saying and they can't hear me either but I can hear the holy heartbeat abound above the sounds of our earthly battleground I can see the holy heartbeat abound in the trees silvered with moonlight yet there is no day and neither is there night the clock is ticking for each of us see the technologists wearing yellow gowns, gloves, and masks touching expression with great message. Beautiful poem. .
Our poems are woven tapestries hung on life. This innovative poem need repeating.
Thank you so much for your encouragement, Jane. Encouragement makes the sun shine a whole lot brighter!
Your poen is very structurally attractive as well as meaningul. Thank you for sharing
this may seem random, susan, but looking through my issa poems, i came on this— Here, I'm here— the snow falling. and i think, there, there, with your words falling, i see you. warmly, glen
Glen, Your poen is very structurally attractive as well as meaningul. Thank you for sharing
This patchwork quilt looks beautiful....and ingenious! You have indeed presented an emergency situation when one is about to breathe his last and the latest technology trying hard to sustain the departing life! The readers feel the tension and agony of this tightrope walk between life and death! The only sound heard aloud is the ticking of the clock and it falls jarring in the ears with some fearful portents! Masterfully created and a 10
WoW, Valsa! ! ! ! ! Do you write short stories as well as poems? ? ? ? If not, perhaps you should! ! ! ! Your prose in this comment was powerful, emotive, and unforgettable! ! ! Much more powerful than my poem! ! ! I give your comment a skyfull of starry-eyed 10's! ! ! ! ! ! Thank you, Valsa, so very much for reading and commenting in depth on my poems!
hahahahahahaha- -oh! ! ! I am in need of money! ! ! ! I shall sue myself! ! ! ! ! :)
the patchwork worked for me. i did not have to totally feel i understood this in order to enjoy it. to MyPoemList. bri :)
Thank you smiley Bri- - by the way, do you ever put a frowning emoji on a poem? ? ? I am glad this patchwork thing works for you and you were able to enjoy it and thank you for pinning it on your fav list! ! !
This is ever so deeply moving put together! .. Very powerful! .. With ever such sentiment and thought! .. Thank you ever so much for sharing this! .. Ever so very many definite 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ...........................+++++
Thank you! You're sure a ray of sunshine! ! ! Even when the starry-eyed 10's are being hung in the night sky!
It's good to experiment. Sometimes it works and sometimes it does not. I found it interesting in the way that you presented the words on the screen. It made them more interesting to read and gave their juxtaposition added to their meaning
Thank you for digging deep into the construction. Yes, I think the shape of the poem on the page is a definite part of a poem!
Tom! ! ! I am so pleased to see your comment. I bow to your method- I just copied some lines from other works of mine- posted and unposted- and did shuffle a couple of lines around - and repeated some for a poetic effect- -and added a word here and there as bridges. My heart and mind are so frozen with the daily snow outside and inside. Knowing your talent, I bet your Dada poems soared! ! !
I once submitted a " Dada" poem. Half lines were cut up and placed into a bag. I drew these out and wrote them out in sequence. Br Edwards said the end product made more senses than most of the poems on PH! Yours is brilliant More of the same, , please
Hi Susan. I once did a Dada poem. I cut up half lines and put the in a bag and drew them out at random and wrote them out in the order they were drawn out. Bri Edwards said the end result was, ore intelligible than many poems on PH! It's great to experiment and yours is a brilliant example. Do more.
Hi again, Tom! ! ! I see PH is at it again, but thank you for persevering until you got your comment over to me Yes, I loved this experiment and I look forward to more in the future! ! ! !
Hi Susan, I just wonder how immensely would you have enjoyed working this out! Drives me absolutely crazy to think that this is a patchwork. I wouldn’t even suspect! ! !
Oh! ! My friend, you know me well! ! ! Yes, I enjoyed working this - -it was like solving a puzzle, it was like finding a hidden message and fleshing it out. Thank you for enjoying this effort. You're such an encouraging member of PH! ! ! ! ! !
The outcome has presented an intriguing poem. It would be a well read book. I have done the same with titles. Thank You
Thank you for reading this experiment. I think it is especially useful for those times we simply can't feel driven to write!
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Robert! ! That would make a great quote! ! !